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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people feel that environmental issues should be resolved on a global level,
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 others think that national solutions are preferable. On the
one
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 hand, there are lots of environmental
problems
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 that happen not only in
one
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country
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,
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 but
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 in numerous
countries
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. Global warming, climate change, and carbon footprints are
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 of serious
problems
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 on our planet. As we live on the same earth, these
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 should be solved in a collective way. A huge number of deforestation in
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country
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 will affect
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 planet.
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,
Amazon
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 rainforest in Brazil contributes the most oxygen in the world. When the forest experiences wildfire, it will affect the carbon emissions in our world.
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, every
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 has its own regulations, including rules in
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 to earth
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.
One
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country
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 or more could not be pressed to obey the rules of other
countries
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.
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, in South Korea, the campaign to buy and use electric vehicles is massively advertised and Hyundai is an example of a car brand that
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 electric cars.
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, there are some
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 that still use
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 vehicles, like Indonesia,
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 the advertisement is not as high as South Korea.
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 is because every nation has the privilege to decide its own rules.
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, there are various environmental
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 that should be tackled internationally,
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, there are
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 some
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 that should be handled locally because of the different regulations in every nation.
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, it would be good if
countries
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 could implement the good things that have already been done by other
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, provided that the result is to make our planet in a better way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • sovereign rights
  • Paris Agreement
  • climate change
  • ocean pollution
  • collective measures
  • economic interests
  • political will
  • enforcement issues
  • free-riders
  • tailor-made solutions
  • transboundary pollution
  • resource constraints
  • global frameworks
  • national efforts
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