The table gives information about the population of new Zealand from 2011 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparison where necessary.

The table gives information about the population of new Zealand from 2011 to 2012.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparison where necessary.
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The table below illustrates a comparison of the population in New
Zealand
between different
ages
in 2011 and 2012.
It is clear that
the population of New
Zealand
accounted for the 15-39 age group
while
in 2011 old adults were lowest the number of people . In detail, it is noticeable that the figures between 2011 and 2012 were broadly in the same range almost 801.750 and 800.000 respectively with a -0,2 proportion change.
However
, people in
40
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-64 categories
ages
were 1.400.000 in
2011and
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2011
in 2012 the inhabitants of New
Zealand
was
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were
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responsible for 1.400.000 with -0.6 per cent changes.
Also
, in the group
ages
between
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15-
39
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,39
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the populations of New
Zealand
in both years were approximately equal about 1.520.000 and 1.500.000 respectively.
While
the populations of old people had a significant difference with +4.0 proportion changes. In the
end
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all
ages
in 2012 were
more
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residents than in 2011 with
+0,6
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a +0,6
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percentage change.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words zealand, ages with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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