The chart shows the number of people in Europe who were effected by 4 types of noise by day and by night in cities and in rural areas in 2007

The chart shows the number of people in Europe who were effected by 4 types of noise by day and by night in cities and in rural areas in 2007
The presented chart illustrates how many
people
in Europe were affected by
traffic
, train, aircraft and
industry
noise
by
day
and
night
in urban areas and countryside in 2007.
It is clear that
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most
people
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annoyed by
traffic
noise
in cities and rural areas. In the countryside
industry
noise
did not influence
people
.
To begin
with,
people
were affected by
traffic
noise
, which accounted for 64
million
in
day
meanwhile
this
data was lower at
night
at 48
million
.
Next,
dwellers who were impacted by train
noise
were 10
million
, and it was
also
higher than at
night
which was 8
million
. The figure for aircraft
noise
was 4
million
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and 1
million
at
night
. With a rise in industrial,
industry
noise
was
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influenced 1
million
citizens
in
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and 250 thousand
people
at
night
.
On the other hand
, the statistics for
industry
noise
in rural areas were 0. The number of
people
affected by aircraft was 2
million
in
day
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and a half at
night
. The train
noise
impacted 8
million
residents in
day
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and 6
million
people
at
night
.
Finally
, there were 34
million
people
affected by
traffic
noise
in
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and 24
million
at
night
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, traffic, industry, noise, day, night, million with synonyms.
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