The chart shows the number of people in Europe who were effected by 4 types of noise by day and by night in cities and in rural areas in 2007
The presented chart illustrates how many
people
in Europe were affected by traffic
, train, aircraft and industry
noise
by day
and night
in urban areas and countryside in 2007.
It is clear that
,
most Remove the comma
apply
people
felt
annoyed by Wrong verb form
feel
traffic
noise
in cities and rural areas. In the countryside industry
noise
did not influence people
.
To begin
with, people
were affected by traffic
noise
, which accounted for 64 million
in day
meanwhile this
data was lower at night
at 48 million
. Next,
dwellers who were impacted by train noise
were 10 million
, and it was also
higher than at night
which was 8 million
. The figure for aircraft noise
was 4 million
in
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during
day
and 1 Add an article
the day
a day
million
at night
. With a rise in industrial, industry
noise
was
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million
citizens in
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during
day
and 250 thousand Add an article
the day
a day
people
at night
.
On the other hand
, the statistics for industry
noise
in rural areas were 0. The number of people
affected by aircraft was 2 million
in day
and a half at Add an article
the day
a day
night
. The train noise
impacted 8 million
residents in day
and 6 Add an article
the day
a day
million
people
at night
. Finally
, there were 34 million
people
affected by traffic
noise
in
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during
day
and 24 Add an article
the day
a day
million
at night
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, traffic, industry, noise, day, night, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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