This graph provides us with percentage information about four entertainment attractions that most visited by tourists in Brighton among 1980-2010.
This
graph provides us with percentage
information about four entertainment attractions that most
visited by Add a missing verb
were most
tourists
in Brighton among
1980-2010.
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between
Overall
, the visitors
of pavilion
rose, while
the visitors
of
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to
Pier
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the Pier
was
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were
in
low level Change preposition
apply
percentage
in comparison with other entertainment centres. In addiion
,the Correct your spelling
addition
visitors
of art
centre rose in 1985 and had a dramatically
drop in 1990.
As we see, the Change the adverb
dramatic
tourists
that visited Pavilion
were in high percentage
. Pavilion
reached the
brilliant 48 Correct article usage
a
percent
which is Change the spelling
per cent
really
high level in comparison with Correct article usage
a really
Art
gallery that reached 8 Correct article usage
the Art
percent
of visited Change the spelling
per cent
tourists
in 1995. Furthermore
, we can observe the dramatically
rise of visited Change the adverb
dramatic
tourists
of Pavilion
between 1985 and 1995, while
the visitors
of Art
gallery fell steadily from 1987 to 2010.
In contrast
, there was steady
fall Correct article usage
a steady
of
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in
visitors
in
Festival Change preposition
to
attraction
between 1980-1995 and Fix the agreement mistake
attractions
then
a gradually
rise from 23 Change the word
gradual
percent
to 28 percent
between 1995-2010. Besides
, from the graph
we can clearly see of Add a comma
,graph
percentage
of tourists
in Pier that had
fluctuated wildly in comparison with Verb problem
apply
Art
gallery and reached 22 Correct article usage
the Art
percent
in 2010 at
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apply
all
.Correct determiner usage
apply
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