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Band 3.5

Autobiography (family upbringing, personality, hobby, etc)

I grew up as the first child in my family;
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 sure I am a goal-oriented person. At the conscious age, of about 4 years old, I started to learn the English language.
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 I was attending kindergarten, my parents influenced positively
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my discipline by adding more complex courses and clubs to my schedule. By the age of six I already knew how to play the piano, had improved my English level, and started my career in sports-ballroom dances. My family's contribution to my personality growth was more than enough and I appreciate that.
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, my English proficiency level is still improving; I have graduated from my musical school where I learned to play the piano, attending 7 years; my career in sports-ballroom dances brought me to the biggest competitions and championships in Kazakhstan and Russia; my ambitions showed me that there are no limitations and I already can do a positive impact on some social aspects as a teenager. At the present time, facing complicated challenges gives me more energy to achieve the highest.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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