IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

In some schools, teacher teach a foreign language to student of primary language to student of the introductory class. What are the advantages and disadvantages associated with this phenomenon? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#schools #teacher #language #student #class #phenomenon
Some educational institutions teach a foreign
language
 as a primary
languages
Correct the article-noun agreement
language
show examples
. Some find advantages
associate
Wrong verb form
associated
show examples
 with
this
 phenomenon and others
belive
Correct your spelling
believe
show examples
 that
this
bring
Change the verb form
brings
show examples
 disadvantages. In the
reaminder
Correct your spelling
remainder
 of
this
essay
Add a comma
essay,
show examples
 both points of view will be explored and a logical
conlusion
Correct your spelling
conclusion
 will be drawn
at the end
. Nowadays,
English
Change the article
the English
show examples
language
 is
a
Change the article
an
show examples
importan
Correct your spelling
important
 skill for professional life and for some adults is hard to learn .
Firstly
,
learn
Wrong verb form
learning
show examples
 a
foreing
Correct your spelling
foreign
language
lead
Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
show examples
many
Change preposition
to many
show examples
benefics
Correct your spelling
benefits
 for people
such
 as better positions in international
companys
Correct your spelling
companies
 or access to
scholariships
Correct your spelling
scholarships
. What is more, many experts argue that children can learn
new
Add an article
a new
show examples
language
 very quickly and
for
this
 reason
a
Correct pronoun usage
it a
show examples
is good idea that teachers teach
subects
Correct your spelling
subjects
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 foreign
languge
Correct your spelling
languages
. To illustrate, I am learning
english
Change the capitalization
English
show examples
 as an adult as a
consequsence
Correct your spelling
consequence
 I spend a lot of money and time and
this
 is a hard journey. Clearly,
learn
Wrong verb form
learning
show examples
languages
 as children is an
advantange
Correct your spelling
advantage
 and
teach
Wrong verb form
teaching
show examples
introductory
Add an article
an introductory
show examples
class
Fix the agreement mistake
classes
show examples
 in a second
lenguage
Correct your spelling
language
 is a way to
achived
Correct your spelling
achieve
achieved
 complete immersion.
On the other hand
, many native
languages
 are at risk of missing as
result
Correct article usage
a result
show examples
.
To begin
 with, some indigenous
comunities
Correct your spelling
communities
speking
Correct your spelling
speaking
seeking
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
native
languages
ant
Correct your spelling
and
show examples
 these are part of their cultures and identities. These
languages
 are at risk
beause
Correct your spelling
because
 in many public
shools
Correct your spelling
schools
show examples
 official
lenguages
Correct your spelling
languages
are use
Change the verb form
are used
are using
show examples
 to teach all
subcjets
Correct your spelling
subjects
.
For example
, in
Mexico
Change noun form
Mexico's
show examples
 countryside many
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
indigenous people are
lossing
Correct your spelling
losing
 their
lenguages becuase
Correct your spelling
languages because
 the public schools in
this
Correct determiner usage
these
show examples
 areas
teaching
Wrong verb form
teach
show examples
 just in
spainsh
Correct your spelling
Spanish
 languges. So, for original
comunities
Correct your spelling
communities
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
schools
teach
Wrong verb form
teaching
show examples
 just in foreign
language
 is a risk
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
 their culture and clearly
this
disadvantages
Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantage
show examples
. In conclusion, I believe that for average
joe learn
Correct your spelling
Joe, learning
 a
lenguages
Correct your spelling
language
languages
 from school
trought
Correct your spelling
through
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
deep immersion is
a
Correct article usage
an
show examples
advantages
Change the noun form
advantage
show examples
 and
teach
Wrong verb form
teaching
show examples
 introductory
class
Fix the agreement mistake
classes
show examples
 in
second
Correct article usage
a second
show examples
lenguage
Correct your spelling
language
 is a good
aproach
Correct your spelling
approach
.
Submitted by alequech on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: