Many species of animals all around the world are on the verge of extinction. Some say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say that we should concentrate more on the problems of human beings. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#species #animals #world #verge #extinction #say #countries #individuals #beings #viewpoints

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

People

Use synonyms

's opinions differ as to whether to focus more on human problems or to concentrate more on animal species

who

Correct pronoun usage

that

show examples

are on the edge of extinction. Prior to giving any

opinion

Use synonyms

I shall be expatiating both

point

Change to a plural noun

points

show examples

views

Fix the agreement mistake

view

show examples

. The

one's

Change noun form

ones

show examples

who

are

Verb problem

have

show examples

Use synonyms

opinion

Correct article usage

the opinion

show examples

that priority should be given to those problems which are related to living

beings

Use synonyms

have their own

view points

Correct your spelling

viewpoints

show examples

. One of the main reason is that

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

to preserve the

animals

Use synonyms

their

Replace the word

there

show examples

should be

healthy

Add an article

a healthy

the healthy

show examples

man with

healthy

Add an article

a healthy

the healthy

show examples

mind

which

Correct pronoun usage

who

show examples

can think of the possible solutions

that

Linking Words

Change the verb form

are

show examples

required to save

animals

Use synonyms

For instance

Linking Words

, at

the

Correct article usage

show examples

time when covid is spread to a very large extent

everywhere

Add a comma

,everywhere

show examples

people

Use synonyms

are dying out. At that time if we had not focused on finding the solution to that problem no one should remain alive to look after

for

Change preposition

apply

show examples

the

aminals

Correct your spelling

animals

show examples

On the other hand

Linking Words

, the part of society who are of the

opinion

Use synonyms

that we should concentrate more on saving the endangered species of

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

animals

Use synonyms

who are on the verge of extinction have their own reasons to follow.

Firstly

Linking Words

, living

being

Replace the word

beings

show examples

is self

Verb problem

are

show examples

sufficient

Correct word choice

self-sufficient

show examples

in solving

its

Correct pronoun usage

their

show examples

own problems but the

animals

Use synonyms

are helpless

population

Fix the agreement mistake

populations

show examples

, who are dependent on

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

human

beings

Use synonyms

, to figure out solutions to their issues.

Moreover

Linking Words

, sometimes these individuals are responsible for the fall in

number

Change the article

a number

the number

show examples

of some species.

For example

Linking Words

, some

people

Use synonyms

for earning money smuggle these

animals

Use synonyms

to other countries where their parts are used for different purposes. Another reason could be that if we have not

done

Verb problem

made

show examples

any efforts today

then

Linking Words

our

future

Use synonyms

generation might be unaware of these different

type

Fix the agreement mistake

types

show examples

of other living

beings

Use synonyms

. They will not get a chance to know about them,

see

Correct word choice

or see

show examples

them just like dinosaurs. So it is our prime duty to save them for our

future

Use synonyms

generations.

To conclude

Linking Words

, since

people

Use synonyms

's opinions may vary

but

Correct word choice

apply

show examples

I am of the

opinion

Use synonyms

that we should concentrate more on the aminal categories which are limited in number and can be extinct in

near

Correct article usage

the near

show examples

future

Use synonyms

This

Linking Words

is because of the dependence of

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

animals

Use synonyms

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

human

beings

Use synonyms

for their welfare and to preserve them for

our

Correct pronoun usage

apply

show examples

future

Use synonyms

generations.

Submitted by caashishgoyal96 on Tue Sep 19 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

9
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
33
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

359 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

verge of extinction
endangered species
ecological importance
biodiversity
ethical duty
ecosystems
medical and scientific research
ecotourism
limited availability of resources
socioeconomic issues
sustainable development
conservation efforts
preserve biodiversity

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7.5
band
Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good father.
Nowadays, there is a proliferation of discussions about how to be a good parent for juveniles when they get married in the future. Some people believe that the method of becoming the best father and mother can be instilled in the school curriculum. I do entirely agree with this, and I will explain any skills needed to be a caregiver.
7
band
Task 2: some cities create housing for their growing population by providing taller buildings. Other cities create housing by building on wider areas of land. Which solution is better?
Recent years have witnessed the explosion of population in many parts of the world leading to housing problems. While many cities choose high concrete constructions as a solution for this dilemma, others expand their areas for more accommodations. This essay will shed light on the negative and positive aspects of both two measures before concluding that I am inclined toward the former.
7
band
Write a letter to a local restaurant that is very noisy. In your letter Introduce yourself Describe the problem Say what actions you will take
I am writing this letter to you to introduce some hurdles that local society has been facing for last few years from your working area. I am one of the dwellers of Naigra town and working in a cotton factory. My living place is just 500 meters away from your restaurant.
6
band
In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, people are willing to do some exercise, and they are approaching an individual trainer to monitor and guide instead of playing sports games, and exercise. People are recommending a personal health care trainer and the person needs to be like an old age people, for athletes, for a business people. This is an appropriate method to need a trainer to the people so it is a more positive development than negatives.
7
band
In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?
In the past, good or bad harvest was critical for people to survive. Nowadays, agriculture developed significantly, however, in some places in the world people still suffer from famine. There are several factors that could explain the situation and there are the number of actions to tackle it.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good father.

Task 2: some cities create housing for their growing population by providing taller buildings. Other cities create housing by building on wider areas of land. Which solution is better?

Write a letter to a local restaurant that is very noisy. In your letter Introduce yourself Describe the problem Say what actions you will take

In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?