Many species of animals all around the world are on the verge of extinction. Some say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say that we should concentrate more on the problems of human beings. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
People
's opinions differ as to whether to focus more on human problems or to concentrate more on animal species who
are on the edge of extinction. Prior to giving any Correct pronoun usage
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views
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have
opinion
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beings
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animals
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people
are dying out. At that time if we had not focused on finding the solution to that problem no one should remain alive to look after for
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aminals
.
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animals
On the other hand
, the part of society who are of the opinion
that we should concentrate more on saving the endangered species of the
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animals
who are on the verge of extinction have their own reasons to follow. Firstly
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beings
, to figure out solutions to their issues. Moreover
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of some species. Change the article
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For example
, some people
for earning money smuggle these animals
to other countries where their parts are used for different purposes.
Another reason could be that if we have not done
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made
then
our future
generation might be unaware of these different type
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types
beings
. They will not get a chance to know about them, see
them just like dinosaurs. So it is our prime duty to save them for our Correct word choice
or see
future
generations.
To conclude
, since people
's opinions may vary but
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opinion
that we should concentrate more on the aminal categories which are limited in number and can be extinct in near
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the near
future
. This
is because of the dependence of the
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animals
on the
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beings
for their welfare and to preserve them for our
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future
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