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Many species of animals all around the world are on the verge of extinction. Some say that countries and individuals should protect these animals from dying out, while others say that we should concentrate more on the problems of human beings. Discuss both viewpoints and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People
's opinions differ as to whether to focus more on human problems or to concentrate more on animal species
who
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that
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 are on the edge of extinction. Prior to giving any
opinion
 I shall be expatiating both
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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. The
one's
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ones
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 who
are
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have
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opinion
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the opinion
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 that priority should be given to those problems which are related to living
beings
 have their own
view points
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viewpoints
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. One of the main reason is that
,
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 to preserve the
animals
their
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there
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 should be
healthy
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a healthy
the healthy
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 man with
healthy
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a healthy
the healthy
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 mind
which
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who
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 can think of the possible solutions
that
is
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are
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 required to save
animals
.
For instance
, at
the
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a
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 time when covid is spread to a very large extent
everywhere
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,everywhere
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people
 are dying out. At that time if we had not focused on finding the solution to that problem no one should remain alive to look after
for
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apply
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the
aminals
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animals
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.
On the other hand
, the part of society who are of the
opinion
 that we should concentrate more on saving the endangered species of
the
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apply
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animals
 who are on the verge of extinction have their own reasons to follow.
Firstly
, living
being
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beings
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is self
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are
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sufficient
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self-sufficient
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 in solving
its
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their
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 own problems but the
animals
 are helpless
population
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populations
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, who are dependent on
the
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human
beings
, to figure out solutions to their issues.
Moreover
, sometimes these individuals are responsible for the fall in
number
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a number
the number
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 of some species.
For example
, some
people
 for earning money smuggle these
animals
 to other countries where their parts are used for different purposes. Another reason could be that if we have not
done
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made
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 any efforts today
then
 our
future
 generation might be unaware of these different
type
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types
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 of other living
beings
. They will not get a chance to know about them,
see
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or see
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 them just like dinosaurs. So it is our prime duty to save them for our
future
 generations.
To conclude
, since
people
's opinions may vary
but
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I am of the
opinion
 that we should concentrate more on the aminal categories which are limited in number and can be extinct in
near
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the near
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future
.
This
 is because of the dependence of
the
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animals
 on
the
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human
beings
 for their welfare and to preserve them for
our
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future
 generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • verge of extinction
  • endangered species
  • ecological importance
  • biodiversity
  • ethical duty
  • ecosystems
  • medical and scientific research
  • ecotourism
  • limited availability of resources
  • socioeconomic issues
  • sustainable development
  • conservation efforts
  • preserve biodiversity
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