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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless The only people travelling inside these vehicals will be passangers Do you think the advantages of Outweigh the disadvantages driverless vehicales.

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In the
morden
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modern
 world, new items are upbringing in the daily Because
technology
 is expanding.
Then
 in the
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future
fure
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 all
vehicals
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vehicles
 will be
diverless
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driverless
.
such
 as cars,
buses
 and trucks . The only
people
traveling
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travelling
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 inside these vehicles will be passengers. I will discuss what are the
disadvantages
 and
advantages
in
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of
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this
 topic. On the one hand, these
day
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days
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 modern
technology
 and technological equipment upbringing in the world.Electronic
vehicals
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vehicles
 are
using
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used
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instead
 of fuel
vehicals
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vehicles
.
Then
people
 think that, in the
future
 driverless vehicles will be
identity
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the identity
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 for
the
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people
 Because
technology
 is growing day to day.
Firstly
, there
are
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
advantages
 connected
being
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to being
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a driveless
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driveless
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driverless
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vehical
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vehicle
.
People
 Can Save
time
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 Because most
people
 are living very busy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
Then
 they can save their money because they do not have
driven
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to drive
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 their vehicle.
Secondly
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,Secondly
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 government can save money. Because
government
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the government
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 are spending more money
for
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on
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 bus drivers and other taxi drivers
for
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apply
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annual
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annually
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 that can reduce.
On the other hand
, many
disadvantages
 are connected being
arounding
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around
 the topic. The main reason is,In the
future
,accidents are increasing.
Becase
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Because
people
are not consider
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are not considering
are not considered
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 about
road
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the road
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 because of driverless. Another thing ,Safety and awareness is reducing Because driver with
buses
are
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is
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 very effective .
Beause
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Because
 they should take responsibility
about
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for
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 their
passanger
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passenger
passengers
. But driverless
buses
 are very
dangas
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dangerous
. Because
individually
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individuals
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 should supply their safety.
Furthermore
, increasing unemployment in the
future
.Introducing
driveless
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driverless
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buses
 or public services in the
future
 more
people
 should leave in
then
 driver job. It is
big
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a big
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 issue. In conclusion, I believe that
,
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apply
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 outweigh the
advantages
 .Because we can't trust
about
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apply
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technology
in
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100%.I do not know
It
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if It
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 is good or bad and durability. After
that
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,that
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 we can identify ,
advantages
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the advantages
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 less than the
disadvantages
.
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