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In some countries more and more people are becoming intrested in finding out about the history of the builiding they live in. What are the reasons for this. How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #research
Exploring the
history
 of dwelling is becoming an area of interest among
people
 in some countries. There can be many reasons for
this
 increasing interest,
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in
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an
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 anthropological
perspective
,
in
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historical
perspective
 and economic
perspective
.
In
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 anthropological
perspective
, it can be considered as the intuition of humans in general in
search
 for their identity and the place they live in. For
an
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one
 might be interested in the home which they inherited from their
grand parents
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grandparents
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 to get to know about the family
history
 or the lifestyle of their ancestors.
On the other hand
in
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historical
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a historical
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perspective
,
specially
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 if the
house
is
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 built with specific technologies in the past or if the
house
is
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 visited by a renowned personality
such
 as a king or a queen, an author, etc.
then
 it is considered as historically valuable asset.
Such
 historical value might affect the economic value of that
house
 or the building. There are many instances
that
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such
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 buildings are converted to tourist destinations and hotels because of the historic value of the building.
Moreover
, depending on the economic perspectives of the modern days,
such
 as accessibility, facilities, architectural design, etc.
people
 might be interested in searching for the
history
 of their dwelling.
People
 can
search
 for the
history
 of their dwelling using many sources
such
 as talking to
people
, searching for available records, using
the
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modern technology, etc. Discussing
with
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who lived in that home or the building previously and talking with
people
 who lived in the neighbourhood is
one
 of the sources that someone can find information about the
history
 of that building.
Moreover
,
one
 can
search
 for available personal records about that
house
such
 as diaries and letters, or official records available with the administrative body
such
 as the municipal council the particular building belongs to. If
one
 is highly keen on finding the
history
 of a building scientifically he or she can use modern technology
such
 as Google maps of different times,
blue prints
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blueprints
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 of
house
 plans, or different scientific testing and scanning methods to
search
 the structural
history
 of the building. All in all, studying the
history
 of
one
’s dwelling will be an interesting subject to discuss.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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