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Some people feel that they should not have to pay any tax and should be able to keep all of the money that they earn. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is widely believed that
people
 don't need to pay any
tax
 and they should be able to keep all the
money
 they earn. Personally, I can neither agree nor disagree with
this
 statement for a variety of reasons. I partly agree that
people
 can keep all of their
income
. One of the main reasons can be that they can use their
income
 to improve their life. In fact, when
people
 don't pay taxes, they can spend
money
 on travel, shopping for everything they want and buying books to improve their knowledge. Another reason can be that, they can use their
income
 for charity funds.
For instance
, in the USA have a charity fund of the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation, they use
this
 fund to solve problems of social and help poor children every year
such
 as a study promotion fund.
On the other hand
, I disagree with the viewpoint that
people
 should not have to pay any
tax
.
Firstly
, the
tax
 is very important for a nation.
This
 is because, all countries in the world need to have state budgets to solve problems about infrastructure
such
 as constructing the transport system, schools, hospitals and parks for children.
Besides
, the
money
tax
also
 helps improve the quality of services education, and health for citizens.
For example
, in my ,country the government often spend a lot of
money
 to construct a school in the suburbs and construct a bridge to help connect some area to develop the economy. In conclusion,
although
 some
people
 think that they should be able to keep all of their
income
, I'm convinced that paying
tax
 have a lot of benefits for both the country and its citizens.
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