you recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. you want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter say how you feel about his performance give details of your musical activities explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

Dear Rahul, I hope
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letter finds you in good health and high spirits! I am writing
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letter to express my feelings with regard to your recent musical tour in India. I am a huge fan of your
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channel , and I had the opportunity to attend your concert in Mumbai. It was fabulous and mesmerizing.
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, the concert was very planned and I had the opportunity to see some of the biggest stars in
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Bollywood
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.
Additionally
, all the songs sung by you are so close to my heart and I
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always cherish
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memory.
In addition
, I would like to inform you that I am a musician trained in
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classical music, and I have my own
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channel. I am a performing artist with 4 years of experience in India.
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, I am
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for my vocals and hold a music
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institution
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in Bangalore to teach young foundlings. I would be very glad if you could pay a visit to our institution and collaborate with me on a new song for my
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channel. Your presence can motivate young children
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a career in music and I will get the opportunity to work and learn from you. Thank you once again for the wonderful concert. Yours Sincerely, Shreyashi
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stellar performance
  • captivating
  • musical prowess
  • talent
  • repertoire
  • collaboration
  • mentorship
  • resonate
  • aspiring musician
  • composition
  • rendition
  • inspirational
  • vocal range
  • harmonize
  • skillset
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