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The table below shows shares of companies advertising expenditure in different media sectors in three countries (Australia, Vietnam, Japan) in 2005

The table below shows shares of companies advertising expenditure in different media sectors in three countries (Australia, Vietnam, Japan) in 2005
The table illustrates the proportion of
expenditure
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 spent on advertising in mass media by businesses in
Australia
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,
Vietnam
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, and
Japan
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 in the year 2005.
Overall
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, companies in three countries spent the largest proportion of their advertising on television,
while
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 the figure for the Internet was the lowest. It can be clearly observed from the table that the highest percentage of advertising spent by plants in
Japan
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 was allocated for TV, at 61%, which was twice as much as that in
Australia
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, followed by the lowest figure in
Vietnam
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 (44%). Meanwhile, the percentage of firms in
Vietnam
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 spending on newspapers was 29%, which was 13% and 7% higher than the figures in
Japan
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 and
Australia
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, respectively. In terms of the other categories, Vietnamese and Australian companies spent the same percentage of their
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 on advertising, at 21% in comparison with only 14% in
Japan
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.
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,
the
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Internet
advertisement
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 was the smallest
expenditure
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 for the remaining countries. Companies in
Australia
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 spent 5% of their
expenditure
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 on
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Internet
advertisement
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 compared to 4% and 3% in
Vietnam
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 and
Japan
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, australia, vietnam, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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