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Some students prefer to take a gap year between high school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantage of this outweigh the disadvantage?

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Nowadays, some high school seniors have a year-long break to work or travel
instead
 of pursuing college. In my opinion,
this
 will be more advantageous for them compared to minor disadvantages. It is evident that students will have a trade-off when they defer university enrollment. A major drawback
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 the fact that they will fall behind their peers in study. In fact, gap-year takers would lose momentum were they to
resum
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resume
 their
study
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 in the university,
therefore
, feeling peer pressure is supposed to be unavoidable.
In addition
 to
this
, some people assume that they will gain a little practical experience in a working environment when it comes to being
early
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 workforce.
This
 is because there are several entry-level jobs assigned to them, which do not help them cultivate relevant job skills.
However
, from my perspective, students will take more
advantages
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 of delaying tertiary education for one year.
In particular
, they will enrich their life experiences and hone their practical skills when travelling or working in alien cultures.
For example
, travelling
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 helps them advance communication
skill
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as well as
 adaptability, which appears to be beneficial in adulthood life.
Besides
, attending vocational training rather than formal schooling, affords them identify a suitable career path.
Therefore
, they will prepare major knowledge and transferrable skills during
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university life if they embark on higher education.
Last
 but not least,
one-year
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time
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 for comprehending and reflecting on themselves seems to be valuable for students before they become occupied with
intense
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 study schedule. In conclusion,
while
 high school seniors might face some small drawbacks when gapping a year, they eventually reap more tremendous benefits on the whole.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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