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Some children spend every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

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It is known, that children are using
smartphones
 every day. Some opinions are that it's positively affecting,
others
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 think that it is gradually taking control of their personal life. ,
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 my opinion is that children could not live without
smartphones
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future we have to adapt ourselves and
also
 understand
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 part of young ones life. First of all,
smartphones
 are so popular that it would be difficult to communicate with kids at school with friends without them, and it would be challenging to follow up on lessons and home tasks not using smart devices. Technologies allow us to be more flexible.
Smartphones
 help parents to get better contact when a child is not at home.
On the other hand
, the easy availability of smart devices distracts real social communications,
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 think that one of the biggest disadvantages is less real-time with family members. Teenagers find and watch necessary information if they have a boring time and they lose their creativity. One more very important negative influencing factor is less exercise or active time outside. Summarizing everything up, would like to say that I find both positive and negative factors. The main point is that we as parents play a big role by teaching and showing examples.
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