Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays majority of
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generation desperately wants to grow up faster in order to be independent, buy more goods and so on.
On the contrary
, our parents usually say that their student lives were more exciting and happy. In
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we will discuss both opinions. Some people like to say, that we want things that we cannot have. As for
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teenagers, they cannot have their money to
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certain age, independence,
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even freedom of choice.
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they are keen to grow up as fast as possible to be able to care about themselves on their own. There are several pluses and minuses of
this
kind of mindset.
For instance
, a 16-years old girl can get a part-job, make her own money,
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about responsibility and
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decision-making
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there are
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risks as well
such
as lack of social support and protection,
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unpleasant experiences
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employee
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and missed
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to be just a child.
On the other hand
, our parents and older relatives keep their precious memories of youth as something magical, when, in fact, their teen lives were full of struggle, in some cases
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power
and abuse. Despite the opinion that to be in your sixteen`s is the best
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experience
you can have, I believe that adult
life
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more benefits and opportunities. Adults can manage their
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on their own, travel, choose
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work, protect themselves and so on.
Last
but not least, benefits are equal to
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the responsibility
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that
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care on their backs,
such
as children, because in
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you are in charge
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the whole human not only yourself.
To sum up
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people to take their time and live in the moment. Each age has
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beautiful moments and great downfalls. As for me, it`s better to trust the
life
cycle and enjoy every minute of
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life
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what you can do is
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make memories and get the best of what
this
life
has offered to you.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Formative years
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Wisdom
  • Significant choices
  • Exploration
  • Financial responsibilities
  • Deeper relationships
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishments
  • Character development
  • Life milestones
  • Adulthood
  • Adolescence
  • Carefree nature
  • Achievements
  • Life satisfaction
  • Stress-free
  • Independence
  • Responsibilities
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