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Some believe that a student’s success is mainly based on the quality of their teaching while others think it has more to do with the student’s attitude. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays certain people believe that pupils' achievements are mainly based on the quality of their aching. others think it has more to do with the student's opinion. Here I discuss both sides. First of all, these days schools are teaching to help students more and mine for everything. Not only
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 and increase their life balance.
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, they teach as well knowledge
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 every subject to Hove to improve.
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, they maintain our good quality.
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, some of them believe that student quality becomes their own attitude. of course, it is very true. because they bone time to
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 they looking for their family attitude. they looking for perant what they do and what they speak.
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 main thing is how to respect adults. In conclusion,
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 of education. they increasing only knowledge.
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 more successful in their own attitude behind their family background. I deeply agree with
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 and more successful in their own
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