The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates the male contribution rates in senior development of IBM,Microsoft and
Apple
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over a time period of 30
years
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from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can be clearly recognised a gain of men in higher positions over the three decades for all three companies. In the
year
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1980,
apple
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consisted of 15% of male seniors
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the least was from IBM at a rate of 3%.
In contrast
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, in the
year
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2010, IBM showed a climb of 63%.
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,
this
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is not the case for
Apple
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and the graph depicts a rate of 25% which is not a considerable growth from the
year
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1980. Microsoft indicates a moderate increase during the 30
years
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starting from a percentage of 17% in 1980 and the latest development was 45% in the
year
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2010. Even though Microsoft have a steady improvement throughout the
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1985 to 2000, during the
last
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10
years
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the
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male involvement has boomed from 30%. Considerably,
Apple
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's high position male employees fluctuated during that time.
For instance
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, there was a downward trend from 1980 to 1985 and it goes up in the
years
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of 1990 and 1995.
Consequently
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, it again shows a decrease in the
year
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2000 and
then
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rose in the
year
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2010.
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