The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world.
The given graph represents the difference between global tourist arrivals in 5 different parts of the earth from 1990 until 2005 year.
Overall
, the country North America
was all the time on
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peak
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the peak
however
, South America
was on
its minimum position until the end.
It can be clearly seen that North Change preposition
in
America
from 1990
year with 70 Change the article
the 1990
million
visitors increased until
approximately 90 Change preposition
to
million
in 2005
year, Change the article
the 2005
furthermore
South Add a comma
,furthermore
America
improved from almost 9 million
until
just over 13 Change preposition
to
million
, but the letter was almost all time on its minimum position.
It is interesting to note that both Central and Eastern Europe and South-East
Asia uplifted dramatically till the end.Correct your spelling
Southeast
Moreover
, the former increased around three times, from 30 to 90 million
,and the letter
increased more than two times from 20 to just over 45 Correct your spelling
latter
million
.
It is obvious that countries Sub-Saharan Africa and South America
improved almost similar
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similarly
furthermore
two
countries Correct article usage
the two
do
not reach 25 Wrong verb form
did
million
tourists.Submitted by dimash171206 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "improved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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