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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world.
The given graph represents the difference between global tourist arrivals in 5 different parts of the earth from 1990 until 2005 year.
Overall
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, the country North
America
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 was all the time
on
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apply
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peak
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the peak
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,
however
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, South
America
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 was
on
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in
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 its minimum position until the end. It can be clearly seen that North
America
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 from
1990
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the 1990
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 year with 70
million
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 visitors increased
until
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to
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 approximately 90
million
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 in
2005
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the 2005
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 year,
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furthermore
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,furthermore
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 South
America
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 improved from almost 9
million
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until
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to
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 just over 13
million
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, but the letter was almost all time on its minimum position. It is interesting to note that both Central and Eastern Europe and
South-East
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Southeast
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 Asia uplifted dramatically till the end.
Moreover
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, the former increased around three times, from 30 to 90
million
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,and the
letter
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latter
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 increased more than two times from 20 to just over 45
million
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. It is obvious that countries Sub-Saharan Africa and South
America
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 improved almost
similar
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similarly
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,
furthermore
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two
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the two
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 countries
do
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did
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 not reach 25
million
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 tourists.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "improved" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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