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The chart below gives information about Somelands' export values from 2005 to 2025. Summarize this chart.

The chart below gives information about Somelands' export values from 2005 to 2025. Summarize this chart.
#information #somelands #export #values
The provided bar chart illustrates information regarding figures for main exports from Someland in 2005,
2015
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and 2015
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 and the prediction for 2025. The unit is in
billon
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billions
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dollars
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of dollars
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.
Overall
, it can be easily observed that revenues from meat
products
 were the
least
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lowest
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while
 values from international tourism have been increasing. Concerning exports of meat
products
, the figures began at 4
billion
dollars
 in 2005
,
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 and
then
 decreased slightly. It is predicted that the values will continue to gradually decrease to around 3
billion
dollars
 by the year 2025.
While
 meat
products
 were responsible for the lowest, international tourism started with the highest figures in 2005, accounting for just above 6
billion
dollars
. The rising trend was still noticed in 2015 and it might reach
near
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nearly
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 8
billon
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billion
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dollars
 by the end of 2025. Moving on to the income from dairy
products
, Someland had a significant rise
of
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in
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 the values of exports from 2005 to 2015, approximately 5 to just below 8
billion
dollars
.
However
, it is predicted that it will decline to around 7
billion
dollars
 by 2025.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, products, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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