The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021.

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The line graph presents information on the price variations of three precious metals between 2013 and 2021.

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, the cost of palladium increased dramatically and platinum prices fell steadily over the

years

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Initially

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, platinum was the costlier metal but by 2021, palladium surpassed and became the costliest out of all 3 metals. Palladium was priced low in the initial 4

years

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, fluctuating at around $750 per

ounce

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in the initial 4

years

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. The costs

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rose significantly from just above $500 per

ounce

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in 2016 to just below $2500 per

ounce

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in 2021. Platinum,

on the other hand

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, was priced at an all-time high of $1500 per

ounce

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in 2013 after which it fell suddenly to $1000 per

ounce

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by 2015. The prices

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then

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remained almost the same for 7

years

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. Gold fluctuated, but was relatively static between 2013 and 2019, costing between $1000 and $1500 per

ounce

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after which it rose considerably to around $1800 per

ounce

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in 2020 at which level it plateaued till 2021.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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4 paragraphs

167 words

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The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021.

In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries, students take a year off finishing school should students take a gap year before attending university? What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

ome children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people believe that it is more important to teach children the literature of their own country than other countries. Do you agree or disagree?