The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The pie chart illustrates the average expenses of households in Japan and Malaysia in 2010 based on five categories.
Overall
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, other goods and services contributed the most to the economy of Japan,
while
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health
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care
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was the smallest segment.
In contrast
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, housing made up the biggest part of the chart of Malaysia and the lowest contribution was made by
health
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care
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. In 2010, the Japanese spent 29% of its expenditure on other goods and services, which was 3% greater than that of Malaysians.
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, Japanese people spent twofold times more on transport and
health
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care
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than Malaysian citizens.
However
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, one-third(34%) currency of Malaysians is expended on housing, followed by food which comprised 27% of their total expenses. Money spent on transport and
health
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care
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was comparatively less than Japanese and they contributed 10% and 3% respectively.
On the other hand
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, money spent on
health
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care
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services was the least in both countries, which accounted for an insignificant proportion.
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