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Some people prefer to carefully plan activities in their free time others think it’s a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your answer?

#people #plan #activities #time #it’s #waste
Some people prefer to
plan
 activities carefully for
there
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their
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 free
time
that
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which
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 is good. There are even people who think that it is
waste
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a waste
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 of
time
. In my
opinion
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 it totally
depend
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depends
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 on
a
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the
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person
 what is better for them.
Firstly
, Planning
is
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in
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advance
 is better. If a
person
have
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has
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plan
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planned
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 things before
that
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apply
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what they have to do
then
 it
become
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becomes
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 easy
as well as
 fast for a
person
.
For example
, if a
women
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woman
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 is free on
monday
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Monday
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 and
plan
 what to do on
sunday
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Sunday
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then
on
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at
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the weekend
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weekend
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,weekend
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 she will save
alot
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a lot
time
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of time
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.
Thus
, a
person
 should do
reseach
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research
 before planning
anythings
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anything
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. Before planning one
person
 should take
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
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 from another
person
 so it
make
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makes
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task
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the task
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 easy. Planning
advance
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in advance
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 can help a
person
to
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apply
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do work in
proper
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a proper
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mannner
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manner
.
Parent
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Parents
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 should encourage
there
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their
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 kids
plan
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to plan
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 and give support.
Secondly
, As every coin have two sides in
same
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the same
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ways
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way
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 planning in
advance
 have two effect positive
as well as
 negative. Same
time
 planning
to
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too
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 much
advance
 is
waste
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a waste
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 of
time
 because things keep on changing fast.
For instance
, planning about trip with friends without asking them is
waste
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a waste
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 of
time
 but after asking
to
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apply
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friends and
then
 planning is good.
Hence
,
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a
the
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person
 should think before planning some things.
Thirdly
, Before going out a
peron
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person
 should take care
about
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of
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 some
sideeffect
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side effects
 which can help to save money.
To conclude
,
according to
 me planning carefully activities is good because it
save
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saves
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time
as well as
 money. But some
its
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it's
it is
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waste
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a waste
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 of
time
.
However
, planning is better.
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