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Some believe that a student’s success is mainly based on the quality of their teaching while others think it has more to do with the student’s attitude. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#believe #student’s #success #quality #attitude
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researchers
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 of their teaching, and other scientists
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 differently. In their
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students
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 both of them have
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students
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achievements
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 side even if the
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qulity
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quality
 isn't good enough in the school or
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As well as
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questionnaires
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a
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 person or Are you pleasure
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start to complain about their teachers and schools. I assume if we ask these
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well
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they will complain
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students
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attitude
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 toward
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education or
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 hand when they search
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successfull
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successful
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noticed if
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has
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interest
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enough
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they will achieve their purposes whether
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 method is good or not.
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for harvard
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researches
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 on their
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 the most successful student has
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a preety
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preety
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pretty
 good quality of education and
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 attitude to their lesson. In
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 both
quality
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 of teaching and
student's
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 approach to lessons or life
act
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big
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 role
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 their future success.
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