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The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Spending in Thousand Pound Sterling

The chart below shows the amount spent on six consumer goods in four European countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Spending in Thousand Pound Sterling
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The bar graph depicts the
amount
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 spent on six
consumer
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goods
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 in four European countries
Britain
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, France ,Italy and
Germany
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. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,it is readily apparent that
Britain
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 has spent more
amount
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 in
consumer
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goods
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.
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, the tennis racquets
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 the least good. Looking at the details, we can see that photographic film was the most
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 spent by four European countries,even
then
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goods
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 spent by
Britain
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.
Germany
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 accounted for 167 and 145 respectively.
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, perfumes in
Britain
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 have observed at 160% and Italy depicts 155%,
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 the least
consumer
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goods
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 have shown the Framce which at 148%.
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Furthermore
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 in the bar ,graphs we can observe those personal stereos in France and
Germany
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 have the same
amount
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 of
consumer
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goods
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 which is 147%.As we observe the toys
goods
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 France and Italy were the same numbers as witnessed ,even though the lowest good has shown in
Germany
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.
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, in
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Germany
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 the toys and CDs were the same
consumer
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goods
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, consumer, goods, britain, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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