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Some believe that a student’s success is mainly based on the quality of their teaching while others think it has more to do with the student’s attitude. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#believe #student’s #success #quality #attitude
It is often argued that who is responsible for a pupil's
study
. Some people believe that it depends on the studying method of
tutor
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, whilst, others think that
student's
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students
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 are the main character.
This
 essay is to shed light on both views
as well as
 my opinion.
To begin
 with the former view, there is no doubt that teachers play a vital
role
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 the successful education of
child
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children
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, that's why parents send their children to
the
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schools. The main
role
 of the examiners is to create a
study
 environment for scholars, in which he or she can feel comfortable. Teachers should focus on practical and logical learning rather than
any
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cramming or
memorized
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 answers. To exemplify, tutors should organize class quiz competitions between pupils or a debate on a specific statement. On the other side, students
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equal
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role
. Self-learning is the key to
succeed
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 in life. Not only for
study
, to master
in
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any skill, a person needs to work on himself or herself.
According to
 a
study
, every student needs to do self-
study
 for about
average
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 of 4-5 hours in a day. The other benefit of self-studying is long time memory of the ideas.
To sum up
, in my
opinion
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 both tutors and learners
plays
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equal
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an equal
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role
.
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