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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is freedom of speech in free society. Now people are beginning to realize that without liberty will not attain good country. Personally, I tend to think that freedom of speech is important.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is freedom of
speech
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free
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 society. Now people are beginning to realize that without liberty will not attain
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 country. Personally, I tend to think that freedom of
speech
 is important.
Firstly
, it is known that everyone has a right to express his/her
thought
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 without getting scared of anyone or any group. What I mean here is that every person comes into
this
 life not to live like in a colony. One of the main reasons behind
that is
 we are figure who has his own individual opinion. A good case in point is as an American citizen, I can say that we are doing well with
this
 compared to other countries, like Pakistan, Turkmenistan, Kazakhstan or North Korea.
On the other hand
, what governments should do does not
instill
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 fear in a person. Because without society they are nothing.
That is
 to say that individuals could test their theories against those of others , counter negative
expression
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 with a different viewpoint, or express their individuality and autonomy for
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 of
country
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 . Take
for example
 people who start rallies or write petitions or volunteers. I work as
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 and I understand what
its
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 like having free
speech
 . In conclusion , taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that freedom of
speech
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 crucial in a developed country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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