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Some feel that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environmentally friendly at the same time. Others disagree with this view. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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Every nation in the world struggles to make their
country
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 a better living place which is only attainable when the
country
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 progresses economically and has
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an eco-friendy
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eco-friendy
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eco-friendly
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 environment. It is often debated that these
both
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 are
imossible
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impossible
 to achieve together,
while
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other
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others
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 believe it a
cuntry
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country
 can have them
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 at the same time, indeed, I
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completely
 agree with the statement. To be economically strong requires a
country
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 to set up more and more industrial work by cutting down
the
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apply
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trees.
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, more industries
indicates
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 more pollution and
green house
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greenhouse
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 effect which
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harm
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harms
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 the environment. In
term
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terms
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 of being
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: economically progressive and
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly, planning is important. If a
country
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 plans to incorporate factors that
leads
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lead
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 to a better economy (eg. heavy infrastructure, more industrial work) in a manner that that it
doesnot
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does not
 cause harm to any nature in the society, will not
helps
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help
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 a
country
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 to grow economically but
also
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enviromently
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environmentally
.
For instance
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, Japan is one of the world
famosu
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famous
 countries
that is
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 not only popular for its modernization but for its greenery and nature. Japan is
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 improving its economy through tourism which
os
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is
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 because of its beautiful environment.
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, on the basis of
above
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the above
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 arguments, it can be possible for a
country
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 to achieve
both
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.
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