The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The graph illustrates information about the percentage of
population
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the population
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aged 65 and over in
Japan
, Sweden and
USA
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the USA
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, between 1940 and 2040.
Overall
, the
population
of these three different countries undergoes numerous changes.
Additionally
, it
would be
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anticipated that the
number
of individuals will increase
singifiantly
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significantly
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2040. The
population
of
USA
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the USA
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was more than Sweden and
Japan
in 1940 with almost 10, 7.5 and 5 percent respectively.
However
, it would be anticipated the highest
number
would
belonged
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to
Japan
in 2040, at around 33%. The
population
of
USA
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the USA
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slightly decreased from 1940 to 1960. for almost 25 years
this
number
stayed sustainable at almost 3%. After 1985, the
population
of
USA
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the USA
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experienced a dramatic increase to 2020 and
this
trend will be
countinuing
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continuing
until 2040. In
Japan
, the
population
rose moderately from approximately 10% in 1940 to 15% in the next 40 years. From 1980 to 2020,
this
number
stayed almost stable, but it will rise to around 23% in 2040. In the case of Sweden, the proportion of
population
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significantly
grown up
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grew
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to almost 15% in 1980. After almost 5 years of decreasing,
this
ratio just cut over the
USA
in
1990s
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the 1990s
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.
This
number
will experience a total increase to almost 25% in 2040.
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