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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The graph illustrates information about the percentage of
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population
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the population
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 aged 65 and over in
Japan
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, Sweden and
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USA
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the USA
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, between 1940 and 2040.
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, the
population
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 of these three different countries undergoes numerous changes.
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, it
would be
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 anticipated that the
number
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 of individuals will increase
singifiantly
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significantly
till
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by
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 2040. The
population
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 of
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USA
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the USA
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 was more than Sweden and
Japan
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 in 1940 with almost 10, 7.5 and 5 percent respectively.
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, it would be anticipated the highest
number
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belonged
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 to
Japan
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 in 2040, at around 33%. The
population
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 of
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USA
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the USA
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 slightly decreased from 1940 to 1960. for almost 25 years
this
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number
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 stayed sustainable at almost 3%. After 1985, the
population
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 of
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USA
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the USA
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 experienced a dramatic increase to 2020 and
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 trend will be
countinuing
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continuing
 until 2040. In
Japan
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, the
population
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 rose moderately from approximately 10% in 1940 to 15% in the next 40 years. From 1980 to 2020,
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number
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 stayed almost stable, but it will rise to around 23% in 2040. In the case of Sweden, the proportion of
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population
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the population
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 significantly
grown up
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 to almost 15% in 1980. After almost 5 years of decreasing,
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 ratio just cut over the
USA
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 in
1990s
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the 1990s
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.
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number
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 will experience a total increase to almost 25% in 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, japan, usa, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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