The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram presents the process of utilizing the
sugar
cane to produce Use synonyms
sugar
in a Use synonyms
sugar
production factory. Use synonyms
Overall
, it can be observed that there are 7 main steps involved in Linking Words
this
process, beginning in the Linking Words
sugar
cane farmland and Use synonyms
finally
forming into Linking Words
sugar
.
Based on the illustration, after approximately 12 to 18 months period for the crops, which are the raw material of Use synonyms
sugar
, to mature, they Use synonyms
then
be harvested in two means: by farmers or by a specialised device. These sources are Linking Words
subsequently
, transferred to the factory and form into juice through a crushing machine. In the next stage, to purify the initial juice, the liquid goes through a limestone filter, after which emerges in an evaporator.
Before the next step, purified juice in the container is heated by means of fire and transformed into another form, known as syrup. Linking Words
This
newly formed material Linking Words
then
fills the centrifuge, which in turn separates Linking Words
sugar
crystals from the syrup by spinning quickly enough. Afterwards, Use synonyms
sugar
, isolated from syrup, is dried and cooled in another bucket and Use synonyms
finally
packaged to shops.Linking Words
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