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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the most liked subjects by
students
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 of two middle schools, A and
B
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Overall
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, the majority of
students
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 in
school
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 A favour the sports
subject
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, meanwhile drawing seems to be the
favourite
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 class for
school
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B
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. First of all, we can see that the least liked
subject
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 in
school
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B
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 is Science as it only has two out of sixty
students
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 who voted for it.
In contrast
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, it is the second
favourite
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subject
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 in
school
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 A where nine
students
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 loved it. Other than that, the sports
subject
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 is
also
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 not favoured by
students
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 in
school
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B
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 but is the most liked in
school
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 A. It has 36 votes in
school
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 A but only 5 from
school
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B
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.
Then
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, it is proven that craft or drawing is the
favourite
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subject
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 for
students
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 in
school
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B
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 where 25
students
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 like it.
However
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, the
subject
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 recorded the least vote in
school
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 A with only for votes. The top second
subject
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 in
school
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B
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 is language and most
students
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 in
school
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 A did not vote for it. It has a difference of 13
students
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 where 18
students
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 put it as their
favourite
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subject
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 in
school
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B
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 but only 5
students
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 liked it in
school
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 A.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, b, school, subject, favourite with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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