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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The display bar chart shows data about the favourite subjects of students from two middle schools,
school
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 A and
school
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B
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. The subjects are social
science
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,
science
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,
language
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,
craft
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/drawing and
sport
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.
Firstly
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, In
the
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apply
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school
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 A, in social
science
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 there were 6, in ,
science
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 there were 9, in
language
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 there were 5
as well as
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 in
craft
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/drawing there were 4.
Secondly
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, In
sports
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,sports
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 it was the highest with 36 but in
school
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B
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 it was only 5 there was a great
differce
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difference
 in
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sports
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sport
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sports
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. In
the
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apply
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school
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B
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, in social
science
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 there were 10, in
science
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 there were only 2, in
language
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 there were 18 and in
sport
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 there were only 5.
Thirdly
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, In
craft
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/ drawing in
school
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 A it was 4 but in
school
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B
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 it was 25.
To conclude
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, the above information describes the favourite subjects of students from two middle schools, schools A and
B
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 and they are social
science
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,
science
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,
language
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,
craft
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/ drawing and
sport
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, b, science, language, craft, sport with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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