IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#bar #information #subjects #students #two #middle #schools #school #b #features #comparisons
The display bar chart shows data about the favourite subjects of students from two middle schools,
school
 A and
school
B
. The subjects are social
science
,
science
,
language
,
craft
/drawing and
sport
.
Firstly
, In
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
school
 A, in social
science
 there were 6, in ,
science
 there were 9, in
language
 there were 5
as well as
 in
craft
/drawing there were 4.
Secondly
, In
sports
Add a comma
,sports
show examples
 it was the highest with 36 but in
school
B
 it was only 5 there was a great
differce
Correct your spelling
difference
 in
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
show examples
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
show examples
. In
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
school
B
, in social
science
 there were 10, in
science
 there were only 2, in
language
 there were 18 and in
sport
 there were only 5.
Thirdly
, In
craft
/ drawing in
school
 A it was 4 but in
school
B
 it was 25.
To conclude
, the above information describes the favourite subjects of students from two middle schools, schools A and
B
 and they are social
science
,
science
,
language
,
craft
/ drawing and
sport
.
Submitted by purvaam383 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, b, science, language, craft, sport with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
What to do next:
Look at other essays: