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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered that
people
 reading
books
 is a better way to develop their imaginations and language skills in comparison with
TV
. In my perspective, I totally agree with
this
 statement and my reasons will be given in
this
 essay. On the one hand,
people
preferring reading
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who prefer to read
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books
 will have more chances to enhance their imagination
better
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than those who watch
TV
 programs or movies. To be more specific, reading
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 readers to use their imagination and creativity to explain the words and meanings written
from
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in
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 the book.
For instance
, reading a novel can bring
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the
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bibliophiles to the world of creativity and imagination where they can use their creative thinking to understand more clearly
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about
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the story that the author
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wants
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want
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 to deliver through the book.
In contrast
, watching
TV
 seems to leave no door for
people
’s creative thinking because they seem to watch the
people
 and their surroundings through visual effects.
On the other hand
, reading
books
 can create more chances for
people
 to commit not only
with
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 written language but
also
support
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 them with their spells and vocabularies. In
details
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, taking myself as an example because of reading economic
books
 , I can learn many useful words and phrases related to
this
 topic which can be used in my IELTS essay to improve my writing band score.
Beside
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 that reading
books
demand
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demands
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people
 to spend time
for
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processing the information written in the book if
we
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they
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 want to understand its meaning;
whereas
;
people
 watching
TV
 can understand the
overall
 meanings of the movie through the pictures and action scenes of the characters in the movie.
Last
 but not least, the process of thinking and analyzing information
while
 reading
books
help
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people
 to develop cognitive thinking and improve brain function, which has a positive impact on language skills development.
To conclude
, I have to say that reading
books
 has a lot of benefits than watching
TV
 and
people
 should spend more time
for
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books
instead
 of hooking
on
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up on
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 the
TV
 screen.
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