The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between

2007 and 2012.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
This
is a bar chart indicating the
number
of
visitors
to 3 different London
museums
from 2007 to 2012. The
number
of
visitors
is indicated in millions. Each different
color
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bar represents one
museum
. There have been many changes in the
number
of
visitors
of
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to
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each of these
museums
throughout the
years
. The most flagrant changes
being
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are
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attributed to the National Gallery. The National Gallery has a significantly increasing trend. In 2007 it was the least visited
museum
of all 3 with only more or less 6
million
visitors
.
Then
it gradually augmented, passing to 11
million
3
years
later in 2010 and
finally
to 16
million
in 2012.
This
is a very significant augmentation as the
number
of
visitors
more than doubled in 5
years
. The Victoria and Albert
museum
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Museum
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on
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,on
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the other hand, has had a decrease in
visitors
. In 2007 it had 14
million
visitors
, far ahead of the two other
museums
but
then
throughout the
years
,
this
number
started to decline. In 2008 it was roughly the same. It was not until 2009 that the
number
of
visitors
truly declined. From 14 to 8
million
.
Then
down again in 2010 from 8
million
to more or less 6.5. Since
then
the
museum
has slowly been regaining
visitors
with 10
million
visitors
in 2012
Lastly
, the
British
Museum
. In 2007, the
British
museum
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Museum
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was slightly behind the Victoria and Albert
museum
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Museum
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with 13
million
visitors
. Unfortunately,
this
number
quickly
declines
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declined
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as in 2008 the
museum
only counted 6
million
visitors
. In 2009, the same, 6
million
. It was not until 2010 that the
British
Museum
started gaining popularity again growing by 1
million
visitors
in 2010 and all the way up to 14
million
in 2012.
Overall
, these 3
museums
had very different evolutions throughout the
years
. Maybe through great expositions, the
British
Museum
and the National Gallery Managed to gain many
visitors
while
the Victoria and Albert
museum
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Museum
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have
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had a slight decline in clientele.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, museums, museum, years, million, british with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "more or less" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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