Some people think that boys and girls should attend school together. Others feel that they should be educated separately. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

In the modern world, we are discussing single-sex schools more and more frequently. Separated
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of them. Some people claim that boys and girls should attend together, others say that we should concentrate on divided
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that we should study together not
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separated.
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, people who say we should attend together, consider that it will not disturb the
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process. It could be explained by the fact that other
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would get
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experience and might increase their comprehension of
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material.
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On the other hand
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that dividing boys and girls as a group is the best way of schooling. Why had
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enforce
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it previously they were
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the peak of popularity in
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in general may help enhance academic records.
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geniuses from there like Alfred Nobel or Bonaparte
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changed
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outlook to anything.
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on Earth. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into consideration I would argue that both
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of
education
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should exist in
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proportions without interfering
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business.
However
, the view I support is
coeducational
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system,
due to
the fact it would significantly improve the social abilities of
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children
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who merely started in primary
school
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.
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