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The Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.

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The table shows the
percentage
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 of
school
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 children that
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attended
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the four types of secondary
schools
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(
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,Grammar,Voluntary-controlled,
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schools
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) in the timeline of 2000,2005,2009.
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,the table shows the
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attendance
attendees
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 it is evident that community
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 was the highest
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 which are attended by the students in 2009.During
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 time period
specialist
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school
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 was recorded with less
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attendence
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attendance
. The community
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 were the best
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 which was recorded with
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percentage
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attendance
 among all.In 2000 it is recorded has joint least
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attendence
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attendance
 with 12%
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attendence
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attendance
 from 32% in 2005 to 58%. Voluntary-controlled
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 progressively declined as voluntary-controlled
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drastically
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 of 50%
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 2000 to 2009.
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 12% in 2000 to 11% in 2005 and 10% in the final year 2009.
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