The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process.

The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process.
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The diagrams illustrate the steps involved in making the chocolate and the
devision
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division
of its price. There are 10 stages in the diagram, from where the
cocoa
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beans
is
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are
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cleaned, to the end product with the reasons of its cost.
The first step is
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that the
cocoa
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beans
is
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filtered, and
then
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the final liquid is 
being
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pressed by
the
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a
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certain machine. After the pressing stage, the product is divided into
cocoa
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powder and
cocoa
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butter as well. The butter is united with the sugar through special equipment, which produces industrial chocolate,
while
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cocoa
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powder is used in the food industry. The finished chocolate is
then
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evaluated. Almost 37 per cent of the bar is the cost of the ingredients, which takes the biggest part of the price. Another 34 per cent goes to the supermarkets and
other
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the other
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three parts to the taxes, companies
as well as
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the
farmers
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farmer's
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labour.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cocoa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultivation
  • harvesting
  • extraction
  • fermentation
  • drying
  • roasting
  • grinding
  • chocolate liquor
  • price distribution
  • stakeholders
  • retail price
  • environmental impact
  • social impact
  • deforestation
  • unfair labor practices
  • fair trade
  • organic farming
  • innovations
  • disease-resistant
  • sustainable production
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