“Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?”

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Nowdays
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students
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are so much busy
in
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study and exam
perpartion
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preparation
, they have no time left for other
activties
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activities
. I think extra-curricular
activities
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is
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more
benefical
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beneficial
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essay
, I will
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explain
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important for
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elaborate
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them,
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students
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that students
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spent
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the whole day with books after some time they feel bored and
stress
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. There are so
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things in extra-curricular
activities
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like
a
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apply
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singing, dancing, painting
compition
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competition
competitions
and sports games. It
is
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also
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effect
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affects
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on physical and mental health
on
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students
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.
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, as per
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survay
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survey
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univerties
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universities
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students
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those
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were
participite
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participate
or not
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participate
in extra-curricular
activities
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,
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after one of
study
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results
were
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shocked. It was
achived
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achieved
better
socre
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score
rather than not
participtie
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participating
in
activities
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.
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students
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it
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wrong way.
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, they have not taken to
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studies
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seriously and miss the class
name
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names
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of extra-curricular
activites
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activities
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at
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the end they were failed in exams.
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of Times of India, every
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10%
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students
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of students
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were failed
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due to
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this
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.
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,
techers
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teachers
are decided the
specfic
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specific
time
to
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activity and
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this
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is not
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on
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the exam
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. In
conculison
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conclusion
, It is a good activity for student for development and growth and it
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according to
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their interest. School
addminstrion
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administration
have
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kept
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anyone
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students
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misused
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this facilities
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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