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the bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when relevant.

the bar charts below give information on road transport in a number of European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons when relevant.
This
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charts
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chart
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 illustrates the distance on different commuting
modes
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 and
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the times
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times
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time
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 spent on
road
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the road
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 of people in
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the Europian
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Europian
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European
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 countries of Denmark, France, Italy,
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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, Germany and Spain. Two main methods are considered
such
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 as own vehicle and public transport.
Overall
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, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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travellers use a car to
travel
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 to work and the most time spent on
road
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the road
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 is in
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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. Denmarkians
travels
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travel
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 the most distances using both
modes
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 which is as high as 15500km.
However
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, travelling times are lower than United Kingdom and only 38 minutes were wasted during moving from one place to another.
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, British citizens prefer public
modes
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 the least and
travelled
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travel
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 only 900km a year,
while
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 Denmark citizens
likes
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like
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 it the most and 3000km of distance is covered throughout
a
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the
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 year.
In contrast
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, Spanish residents tend to utilize
own
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their own
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modes
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 of
travel
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 the least and they only
travel
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 around 8200km per year. Italians take an average of 21 minutes to move between distances.
Furthermore
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,
Europians
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Europeans
 are likely to use
own
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their own
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 transport rather than using buses or trains in general. In
addtion
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addition
, they
travel
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 for a moderate time of 31 minutes
everyday
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every day
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words modes, travel, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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