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Most countries are compared by their economic success. Do you think there are some other important factors that need to be taken into consideration? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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It’s true that most
countries
 are compared by their economic
success
 nowadays though there are some other contributing factors as well which could play a significant role in determining the development of any
country
 in the world.
However
, the economy is one of the biggest factors in figuring out how developed the
country
 is. To start with other criteria to figure out the
success
 of a
country
 I would like to mention another vital factor which is education. Without education, it's impossible to rank as a developed
country
.
However
, we know there are many regions in third-world
countries
 where the economy is strong despite the large proportion of uneducated people who are rich because education is not a mandatory requirement to become rich.
Therefore
, it’s a key factor to be taken into consideration.
Secondly
, Agricultural
success
 could be another big factor that can play a significant role in assisting a
country
 to rank at the top among developed
countries
. By exporting produced goods and crops a
country
 can earn not only foreign remittance but
also
 assign a large portion to agriculture-related work.
This
 could be a great option to reduce the unemployment problem as well.
Lastly
, agriculture is
such
 an asset for a
country
 which
also
 helps to solve malnutrition. The more crops or goods a
country
 can produce the more the price of those agricultural products would be reasonable.
Lastly
, the transportation system and crime rate should
also
 be considered
while
 determining their
success
. There are many
countries
 in the world which are rich and economically strong, but their crime is so high that they rank at the bottom of the safest
countries
 list.
However
 economic
success
 ranks top to determine the development of any
country
.
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