Food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilizers and better machinery. However, some of the methods used to do this may be dangerous to human health and may have negative effects on local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Many today argue that

due to

the

growth

in the population numbers, there has been a steep increase in the demand for

food

.

Therefore

advanced

machinery

and fertilizers are used to fasten the

growth

of plants and meet

people

’s demand at low

price

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.

Although

this

situation can bring some benefits

such

as for

economy

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, these genetically modified

foods

could damage the health of

people

. To start with, it is admitted that

this

new means of farming has brought numerous benefits. First of all, using different pesticides and fertilizers made the cost of

food

much more affordable especially for low-income families.

Moreover

, it can fasten the

growth

of plants, increasing the number of crops on the land.

In addition

, the use of new

machinery

has

also

brought some conveniences for farmers. Because it is an indisputable fact that utilizing machines can save the time and the

labor

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.

As a result

, farmers can have

also

time to spend

for

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themselves or

for

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their family members.

Furthermore

, with modern

machinery

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the process would go without emitting much

wastes

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waste

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to the environment.

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,

a

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research carried out on wheat using new fertilizers contributed to 40% productivity and higher strength against weather disturbance which can be a beneficial solution to famine in different parts of the earth.

However

, though there are some advantages that the use of

food

additives and

machinery

can bring, still the drawbacks of the condition outweigh.

Initially

, using chemical substances and fertilizer to make the flavour of

food

better and fasten the

growth

of

plant

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plants

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can harm the health of

people

. It is an undeniable fact that the level of toxins in these

foods

would be

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is

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significantly high and

as a consequence

, it

cause

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causes

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different ailments

such

as allergies, cancer, obesity

and

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etc.

Moreover

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many

restaurant

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restaurants

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are

also

selling GM

food

for much cheaper

price

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prices

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to attract a lot of

people

. After consuming these

foods

people

start suffering from illnesses and even many doctors predict for parents that there can be a high risk of mental disabilities for their newborn babies. In conclusion, health is

much

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more important thing than

the

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money. It is better to consume healthy and organic

foods

for quite expensive

price

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prices

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rather

that

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than

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eating harmful

foods

for cheaper

one

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ones

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.