The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The bar graph illustrates the regular consumption and buying of
coffee
and tea by Australian residents from five different
cities
in the
last
4 weeks.
Overall
, it is obvious that the highest rate for going to
cafes
to drink
coffee
or tea was for Melbourne and Hobart citizens
Rephrase
apply
show examples
similarly
.
Additionally
, it has been reported from all these
cities
that instant
coffee
was the first chosen drink among residents of these
cities
. Regarding going to
cafes
, more than 60% of the population of Melbourne, Hobart, and Sydney went to
cafes
in the
last
4 weeks.
Moreover
,
while
over a half of Brisban citizens went to
cafes
in the
last
4 weeks, in Adelaide only less than a half did the same. Focusing on the consumption of
coffee
, around 53% bought fresh and less than two-fifths bought instant
coffee
in Hobart,
while
less than 52% of other
cities
in Australia chose to buy fresh
coffee
.
In addition
, the gap between buying instant
coffee
instead
of its alternative in Adelaide and Brisban was huge with nearly 14% and 15% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, cafes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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