The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predicitions for 2030 and 2040.
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the Philippines
Malaysia
, Thailand
, and Indonesia
from the year
1970 to 2020 where trends were upward along with
the forecasting of 2030 and 2040.
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people
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Malaysia
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Philippines
by 5%, but again rose by near about 2% in the year
2020. In contrast
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countries
Malaysia
, Thailand
, and Indonesia
percentage
of the citizens were improved.
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the percentage
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2040
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