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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Globalization has made the fact that
people
 live in a country where speaking a foreign
language
 is essential to be true.
Therefore
, some claim that
this
 causes serious social problems and practical problems.
Nevertheless
, considering the improvement in
language
 and independent
skills
, I strongly disagree
this
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 point.   Undeniably, living in a foreign country may bring mental health
due to
 the
language
 barrier. Human beings are
the
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creatures living in a group
,
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 and are not suitable for living alone in most situations. If a person does not understand any second
language
,
instead
 of his mother
language
, effective communication cannot be made with others, which will lead to the emergence of loneliness and mental illness.
In addition
, even if an individual may use a foreign
language
 to some extent,
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misuse may
also
 occur because learning a second
language
 is not a skill that can be undertaken in a day, resulting in that the efficiency of communication is in a low way.
This
 can
also
 bring psychological health.  
However
,
language
skills
 can be promoted by living in a foreign
language
. Even though the aforementioned issue may exist, body
language
 is another effective method to talk with local citizens because it was the main way for ancient
people
 to exchange ideas in
the
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circumstances where there was no
language
.
Besides
, local individuals who are hospitable like to speak to foreign
people
 in a way that they can understand when a word or simple sentence can be used. After enough similar practices are made, non-native speakers can feel the advance of their
language
.  
Furthermore
, independent
skills
 can
also
 be improved by living in other countries. In a situation where one has to use an unfamiliar
language
, he needs to face the challenges that may happen in life without any help from his family members or
friends
. In the process that facing difficulties and solving them, his independent
skills
 can be enhanced. Take making
friends
 as an example, making
friends
 in a native
language
 environment is mostly passive, and one gets to know other
people
 through his parents and
friends
. But in a foreign expression environment, he must actively communicate with others in order to make
friends
.   In conclusion,
although
 living in a country where you have to speak a second
language
 may cause negative development in the short term, the comprehensive ability,
such
 as
language
 and independent
skills
, can be facilitated in the big picture,
this
 is the advantage that cannot be ignored.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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