Two charts show the use of broadband connections in several developed countries.

Two charts show the use of broadband connections in several developed countries.
The presented table illustrates the development in broadband connection usage in 5 different
countries
and the given bar graph demonstrates the number of
connections
per 1000 individuals before and after the changes.
Overall
, The USA and South Korea predominate the other 3
countries
however
, America took the
first
place after the changes.
Moreover
, Britain which had the lowest number of
connections
at
first
, experienced the most change among these
countries
and finished above
Switzerland
and
Germany
. At
first
, South Korea and The USA were the
first
and second
countries
in terms of the most
connections
with 122 and 93. After the changes, The USA skyrocketed to 251.1 by a 170% increase
while
South Korea experienced the lowest percentage of change with 20% and lost its place to America.
Switzerland
in the third place, noticed a huge gap with the Americans and Koreans with just 3.6
connections
per 1000 people and
Germany
and Britain were in the next places with 3.4 and 3.3 respectively.
Although
Britain had the least
connections
at
first
, they rose 230% which is the highest percentage change and they finished above
Switzerland
and
Germany
with 10.89.
Germany
and
Switzerland
grew 80 and 120 percent to 5.616 and 7.92 broadband
connections
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "first, ".
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, connections, first, switzerland, germany with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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