Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.
In recent years,many children and adults
are
exposed to computers. Mainly Wrong verb form
have been
the
teenagers are using digital gadgets for more Correct article usage
apply
time
. However
,it has its own benifits
and demerits Correct your spelling
benefits
according to
their usage.
To begin
with advantages, it helps the child in the part of their studies and able know the different shades of the world. That makes the children to
act like Change the verb form
apply
a
mature Correct article usage
apply
teen
. In the Fix the agreement mistake
teens
real
Add a hyphen
real-time
time
world both parents are concentrated on their own employement
,Correct your spelling
employment
they
consume less Correct word choice
and they
time
towards their kids
education. So, by using laptops or desktops they make their children Change to a genitive case
kid's
kids'
to
focus Change the verb form
apply
in
their education. They Change preposition
on
also
play video games which helps them in stressbuster or relaxation.
Till now we have seen how it benifits
to little Correct your spelling
benefits
one
. It has Correct pronoun usage
ones
it
own cautions Correct pronoun usage
its
also
. In small kids
their eyes are very sensitive partAdd a comma
kids,
,
when they Remove the comma
apply
attached
to the LED screen Add a missing verb
are attached
which
Correct pronoun usage
it
produce
Change the verb form
produces
high
sense of radiation that Add an article
a high
make
little eyes Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
week
. Correct your spelling
weak
In which
we Change preposition
Which
are
Verb problem
have
seeing
in recent Wrong verb form
seen
time
many Fix the agreement mistake
times
lill ones
are affected with Verb problem
people
eye-diseases
. If we provide any Correct your spelling
eye diseases
type
of phones
they may use Fix the agreement mistake
phone
in
inappropriate Correct pronoun usage
it in
way
that Fix the agreement mistake
ways
makes
their life to put them into Verb problem
put
the
danger. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, a small kid is using smart phone
at the age of 12. Correct your spelling
smartphone
This
makes others attracted to it which
they force their parents to get it to them. So as a Correct word choice
and
family
they should keep some restrictions Add a comma
family,
to use
any Change preposition
on using
type
of smart devices
.
In conclusion,Fix the agreement mistake
device
i
strongly Change the capitalization
I
belive
that there are more drawbacks. Correct your spelling
believe
Their
should be some Replace the word
There
type
of restrictions like spending hours on mobile or providing some type
of authentication to a system. It is allowed for the education purpuse
only.Correct your spelling
purpose
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
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- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
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- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...
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