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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The design represents the plot of an airport at present
how
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 it will look after reconstruction
the
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 upcoming year.
Overall
, it is clear from the plan as it portrays the upgradation of SouthWest Airport from
this
 year to next year. There are many development that includes ATMs for money withdrawal, Car hiring facilities, bag drop spots and so on.
In addition
, it consists
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lot of gates ranging between one to eighteen
whereas
 now it has only one to eight gates.
Firstly
, now it consists of a small arrivals opening which has a very small pathway and immediately after crossing the
zone
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 there
has
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a
passport
control
 customs to check the passenger's
passport
.
Moreover
, it includes a walkway at the top consisting of eight gateways. Security
passport
control
 should be passed
,
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 before the passengers move to
departure
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the departure
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 area after the check-in process
gets
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 over. In case any waiting occurs, passengers can have a coffee in
cafe
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the cafe
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 area which is located opposite
to
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the check-in spot.
Secondly
,
development
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the development
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 of
airport
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the airport
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it had
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has
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 made
a
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significant construction which includes spacies arrivals, a car hiring scheme, an ATM for money withdrawal and
cafe
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a cafe
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 in front of the
passport
control
 customs.
Furthermore
,
instead
 of having a walkway sky trains are implemented for comfortness. There are several other gateways
had
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have
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 been included in the plan which has an additional
of
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ten. Many other facilities like
presence
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the presence
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 of shops behind the security
passport
control
 and one bag drop section in
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the departures
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departures
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departure
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 zone for
passenger's
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passenger
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 usability.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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