theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays
business
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people
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are more aware of how to make their goods more popular
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so that it gets sold faster and successfully. That’s why they do their marketing, stating that their
product
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is newer and most recent influencing
people
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to get themselves attracted to it. I think for them it is profitable but those
customers
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, sometimes become victims of the
product
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they purchase after viewing the advertisement. When I say it’s good for the
business
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people
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is because with, their super computed and well-designed advertisement,
people
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believe that their goods are recent and better quality
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they viewed in the media.
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they purchase revenue
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owner.
For instance
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, say computers, these products are usually sold when it is quite new and recent with more advanced features.
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usually attracts
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when they see all those features on the screens making them eager to get one for them profiting the
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owner.
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,
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users or
customers
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are sometimes not satisfied with the
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quality and their
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show. When
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a mismatch between the
product
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and their prior promotion of the
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,
people
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become victims resulting in losing trust in their
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.
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, it gains
people
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’s attention to their
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when they state about the
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and its recent updates.
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too contributes remuneration of the
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people
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.
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, we see both benefits and losses for the
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. In a nutshell, I would say that the form of advertisement is good for the shopkeepers
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for the
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.
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, the
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should be responsible for their choice of an item.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competition
  • Consumer demand
  • Novelty
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Differentiation
  • Attract
  • Generate
  • Interest
  • Positive aspect
  • Negative aspect
  • Emphasize
  • Balancing
  • Quality
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