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theie advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays
business
people
 are more aware of how to make their goods more popular
,
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 so that it gets sold faster and successfully. That’s why they do their marketing, stating that their
product
 is newer and most recent influencing
people
 to get themselves attracted to it. I think for them it is profitable but those
customers
, sometimes become victims of the
product
 they purchase after viewing the advertisement. When I say it’s good for the
business
people
 is because with, their super computed and well-designed advertisement,
people
 believe that their goods are recent and better quality
as
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 they viewed in the media.
Then
 they purchase revenue
the
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 owner.
For instance
, say computers, these products are usually sold when it is quite new and recent with more advanced features.
This
 usually attracts
customers
 when they see all those features on the screens making them eager to get one for them profiting the
business
 owner.
In contrast
,
product
 users or
customers
 are sometimes not satisfied with the
product
 quality and their
product
 show. When
such
 a mismatch between the
product
 and their prior promotion of the
product
,
people
 become victims resulting in losing trust in their
product
.
Moreover
, it gains
people
’s attention to their
product
 when they state about the
product
 and its recent updates.
This
 too contributes remuneration of the
business
people
.
However
, we see both benefits and losses for the
customers
. In a nutshell, I would say that the form of advertisement is good for the shopkeepers
as well as
 for the
customers
.
Nonetheless
, the
customers
 should be responsible for their choice of an item.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competition
  • Consumer demand
  • Novelty
  • Innovation
  • Progress
  • Differentiation
  • Attract
  • Generate
  • Interest
  • Positive aspect
  • Negative aspect
  • Emphasize
  • Balancing
  • Quality
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