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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages .do yoou agree or disagree?

#people #car #yoou
Nowadays,
cars
 play an important role in our day-to-day life.
However
, some
people
 believe that having a vehicle has more drawbacks as compared to its benefits.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
 notion and we will discuss its pros and cons in the forthcoming paragraphs. There are some darker sides to having
cars
.
To begin
 with, it creates pollution and traffic congestion problems. which
further
 leads to numerous deadly diseases
such
 as breathing problems, asthma and skin allergies.
Besides
this
, traffic congestion demands new infrastructure for the city which may disposition the budget of local councils.
Additionally
,
cars
 are creating depletion of our natural resources
such
 as fossil fuels, petrol and gases, which take hundreds of years to process. Examining the brighter side of
this
 the foremost reason is time saving to go from one place to another place without any delay. To add to
this
, commuters can avoid harsh weather conditions
while
 using their private vehicles. Not only
this
 but
also
 delays could be avoided in their emergency situations like going to the hospitals with the help of private
cars
.
For instance
, my father suffered from a fever at night. It was a couple of days ago, it was very easy because we took him to the hospital at night. It is very condiment aseptically when elderly
people
 are sick at home.
Furthermore
, physically challenged
people
 can easily access the local city with their
cars
 and live their lives independently. Because the usage of public transport includes walking distance from the destination location to the bus stop and sometimes it is very challenging for
people
 with disabilities to cover the same distance. So the benefits of
cars
 are undeniable.
To conclude
,
although
 there are a few disadvantages for
cars
 but advantages are
also
 undeniable. If we use our
cars
 more efficiently, it might be very fruitful in the near future.
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