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Some people claim that there are more disadvantages of the car than its advantages .do yoou agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
cars
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 play an important role in our day-to-day life.
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, some
people
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 believe that having a vehicle has more drawbacks as compared to its benefits.
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, I completely disagree with
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 notion and we will discuss its pros and cons in the forthcoming paragraphs. There are some darker sides to having
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.
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 with, it creates pollution and traffic congestion problems. which
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 leads to numerous deadly diseases
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 as breathing problems, asthma and skin allergies.
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, traffic congestion demands new infrastructure for the city which may disposition the budget of local councils.
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,
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 are creating depletion of our natural resources
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 as fossil fuels, petrol and gases, which take hundreds of years to process. Examining the brighter side of
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 the foremost reason is time saving to go from one place to another place without any delay. To add to
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, commuters can avoid harsh weather conditions
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 using their private vehicles. Not only
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 but
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 delays could be avoided in their emergency situations like going to the hospitals with the help of private
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.
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, my father suffered from a fever at night. It was a couple of days ago, it was very easy because we took him to the hospital at night. It is very condiment aseptically when elderly
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 are sick at home.
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, physically challenged
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 can easily access the local city with their
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 and live their lives independently. Because the usage of public transport includes walking distance from the destination location to the bus stop and sometimes it is very challenging for
people
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 with disabilities to cover the same distance. So the benefits of
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 are undeniable.
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,
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 there are a few disadvantages for
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 but advantages are
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 undeniable. If we use our
cars
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 more efficiently, it might be very fruitful in the near future.
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