The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six ‎cities.‎

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six ‎cities.‎
The table illustrates the information about how underground railway is being constructed in six different cities.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen in
this
chart that London was the oldest city to date opening and
also
the longest
kilometers
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of route,
while
Tokyo has the most passengers per year. The first subway within that
cities
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city
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went to London, which stood at 1863, it was totally different from other cities that had been built for more than 1900.
Besides
that, London
also
has the longest
speeds
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of the line which contributed to 394 long.
However
, Los Angeles is the newest one who
have
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been constructed in the 20th century. Tokyo and Paris have the highest
participants
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which constituted
at
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more than a thousand. Kyoto and Los Angeles have the shortest journey of route which accounted for 11 and 28 respectively.
Furthermore
, they
also
have the least of total visitors which made up just under a half.
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