international sporting events are costly and bring problems to the hosting country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? give specific example.

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making it
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an industry of making money from hosting
the
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events. Some
people
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it's a bad thing and
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problem for the hosting
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and give my personal view. On
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hand, some
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make the
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the
country
.I extremely agree with
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country
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using
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the
sport
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tools
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for sharing
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name
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the
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in FIFI 2021 sharing
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there
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identity and
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him
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so popular because of
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the opposite for many thinks I
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because there not social or they
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not like
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people
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another country
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country
.
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event
sport make
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a
big
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population and
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of
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traffic cars
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more crowded an example of that when
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game
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in Oman
2010
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, they were no control
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the
people
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,the government
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not
be
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ready very well for
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people
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the
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sport
have
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more advantages than disadvantages, I personally prefer
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sport
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sports events
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event
and I see it in a good way to make the
county
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country
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more famous in the media and
tv
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TV
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.
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